What Others think Of My Conscious..

Hi, all. So I'd like to talk about some of the feedback I got on an essay that might have been one of the most enjoyable writes I have ever done. I loved writing an essay on my stream of consciousness because, as I have said before, I love to be impersonal, and on this assignment, I was able to do just that. I love talking about what other kids are doing out on the quad, Cornell's suicide rate, and thongs....lots of thongs. I wrote it with almost the same mind set that I write most of these blogs, and that can't be too terrible can it?

Anyways, I was really happy to hear my feedback because my peers that read it seemed, for the most part, to enjoy it and find something significant out of it. I did discover that I may have the potential to confuse a few people with my opening line: "Charlie told his mom that he would buy the pencil himself". I am coming to the realization that not every person happened to have an english teacher in high school who was obsessed with Virginia Woolf, therefore transitioning that obsession over to me. So when I write that line, I wrongly assumed that everyone would just get that that line alludes to the opening line of Woolf's "Mrs. Dalloway". Oh well, I don't have regrets, I will continue to allude to allude to my favorite writer and just hope that enough people get the reference, though I suppose it was a little smug of me.

Besides that, both of my classmates seem to have a good reaction to the paper, admiring my openness towards contradiction, opening up the floor for the inner debate in my mind about social norms and why people do what they do. People seem to like the thong story. I'm glad they reacted well to that. Anyone who reads this that is still in high school (I don't know why a high school student would read this, but whatever), don't worry, you will definite have many thong-related adventures when you get to college. It's a good time.

One of the big things that I can tell that I need to work on is how people will receive my tone. When I mentioned in my paper that it would be absurd for me to actually sit down to eat lunch by myself, some people may actually think that I personally and terrified to just sit down and eat lunch by myself, when what I would really like to do is say to the reader that this is a point being made about the general overview of the masses, especially in high school and college settings. To their credit, this is not the easiest thing to conclude in my paper, because I'm pretty aggressive with my fears to eat lunch by myself and walk around outside without anything important to do. Overall, I'm happy with how it turned out. Now, to edit...